WHO WINS THE WRITING CONTEST?!?
My 2 friends and I are all writing books, and want to know who's is best! Below is the first paragraph of each. give maybe a quick review of each if you want, and vote!!!
Paragraph 1. (A sci/fi fantasy)
The Phoenix Cult. It cannot rightly be called a religion, more like a method. Anyone who finishes the Cult’s final ritual becomes and outcast of society almost instantaneously. Even the Phoenix Cult’s founder, Constantine Graham, has so far not gone through with the Flame Rite. Only those who are desperate, who have nothing to lose and anything to gain, put themselves of to the sacrifice for an unknown profit. Only people like Reeve Trinidan.
Paragraph 2. (An action/drama that takes place in a fictional country similiar to East Germany in 1980)
As the sun quietly set on the horizon, Nathaniel found it ever more difficult to concentrate. There were so many things that could go wrong at any moment; in fact, it was a miracle that they had lasted this long without being taken out. He admired his father for keeping the revolutionaries so well organized, however, he knew that he could not possibly do so well himself. Not only that, but people were determined he never get a chance to lead. With twelve known attempts on his life, and possibly more that never got off the ground, Nathaniel Skye is one of the few teenagers ever to face the perils of death by assassination.
Paragraph 3. (A steampunk mystery story)
Whoever invented cameras… I want to hurt them. Paintings. Lovely. These “photographic images” do nothing for me, though. Things cannot be altered, and once your name becomes well-known you simply must see a photographer, and so on, until I am actually recognized as I walk down the street. Who knows what could happen then? And… call me old-fashioned, if you wish, but the superstition about part of your soul going into the image when your picture is taken and leaving you? As a magician I can say more honestly than anyone I do not believe in magic… however I am still worried.
My 2 friends and I are all writing books, and want to know who's is best! Below is the first para...
First of all, these are all very good in their own right. None of them have the feeling of a Twilight knockoff (which there are WAY too many of floating around the internet these days) they all sound very unique and original which is good. Second, these are different genres, and as such cannot truly be compared to one another objectively. The Phoenix Cult sounds intense and creepy and I kind of want to know what happens next, but only because of my morbid curiosity. The East German-ish one is a little slow to begin. The vocabulary is a little flat and it switches too much between modern words and phrases and old-fashioned words and phrases similar to things my grandparents used to say. I'm not familiar with exactly what a "steampunk mystery" is, however the writing style is intriguing. It seems to follow the main character's thoughts very well. People often think in fragments, so for me, even though it's unorthodox, it works. As far as intrigue and what makes me want to read on, I'm going to say Paragraph 1 got my attention immediately. The others could still be good, but this one hooks me in especially since the founder of this Cult is not even willing to go through with the final ritual.
I'd like to see the whole thing before I really judge, but based on these opening paragraphs, #1 has my vote.